[Archived] New Hero Ideas I! (READ THE OP)

[TranquilSilence]

Thanks for your feedbacks,I have two more Heroes,One I will post now,and one I need you guy's help on,I need a Cool title (Here are the Details);

Name:Clay, (Title pending)
Genesis:Bio
Class:Sentinal
Image:

And now for the Finished Hero;

Living-Weapon Name: Giaus,The Gaussmetal Guardia
Classification:Tempest-Cyber
Picture:
Link
Description:Giaus' main body is a Gaussmetal orb,strong against attacks,yet still flexible and light,His brain (All that remains from his time as an organic) is incased in a small chamber in the Front of the Orb,designed to look like a Medieval Knight's Helmet.
His limbs a re strong and short,perfect for Firing projectiles at far away foes,and defending the helpless of Infinity's Cities.
Bio:Giaus was once a preacher on Infinity,In the Toxic cesspits of Infinity's industrial districts he led the Ordinary workers in a Dream of Freedom,In a dream that he promised would return Infinity to it's former peace and glory.

However he caused too much anger among the numerous gangs and Mobs that roamed the Underworld at night and was brutally slaughtered in a Mugging,He was left in a pool of dank,dark slime,alone and cold as his life slipped away from him...

Before he went under a tall being appeared to him,and touched him,When Touched Giaus found a new source of Strength and rose to his feet.Dripping blood,he followed the Being into a decrepit factory,log since past production days,their he fell once more...and he knew he would not wake...

While Giaus died,the Crogenitor Suzu,used instruments hidden in the Factory to remove the Giaus' vitals and place the inside a flexible,gaussmetal shell.This done he added powerful magnetic accelerator cannons to Giaus' hands,and then Cleansed the Body withs steam.

When Giaus woke again,He twisted his hands,and found himself to be in a new body,The Body of an inorganic warrior,the body of a being which could not feel pain...Giaus Passion remained however.He strode out of the factory and used magnetic powers to bring down the Drug bosses and Crime lords of Inifnity,He defended those who had nothing to fight for,would face endless hordes and not falter...Then the Darkspore invaded,and as Giaus crushed Darkspore corpses beneath his feet in the Streets,those who protected whispered his name...Giaus,The Gaussmetal Gaurdia...

Abilities:
Gausspunch (Basic ability-Physical damage-Range)
Giaus fires one of his magnetic fists at a darkspore,dealing 5-11 physical damage and a chance for a 3 second Stun
Combo Punch (Ability-Physical Damage)
Gaius fires both of his fists at a target in quick,Brutal succession.Each fist deals 15 damage,and if both hit the Target will be knocked back a distance
Resonance Cannon(Ability-Energy damage)
Giaus manipulates magnetic sound waves in his body to shake an area around him,If in a Cave there is a chance that large rocks will fall and crush darkspore.Has a Chance of Dazing enemies and catapulting them up into the Air,dealing damage when they land
Steam Clean (Squad ability)
Giaus' squad ability cleans his body of all Inflictions and Debuffs with the glorious power of Steam.The Steam begins to radiate from Giaus in a small radius,dealing 5 damage to each darkspore caught in it and Burning them for a short time

[FfDdc]

Yalan, the Dimensional Riptide
Type: Tempest
Genesis: Quantum

Bio: When Crogenitor Zelem stitched together the pieces of Naktos and created Zelem's Nexus, he left something over. Those things were riptides; rips in space-time that fluctuated throughout the galaxy. Fortunately, Zelem's work was skillful enough that the riptides were of no bother to any beings larger than a single cell, but no being is perfect, and though Zelem spent many years attempting to patch up the rips he had made, a few managed to elude his grasp.

Traversing the universe, these few riptides managed to absorb sparks of sentience from the beings in the universe; a single thought here, a whole idea there. Before long, the riptides managed to form themselves into a single being, who named itself Yalan. Feeling a sense of inquisition for the person who had created it, Yalan made his way back to Zelem's Nexus, only to see it ravaged by Darkspore.

For the first time realizing what the word "rage" meant, Yalan let himself loose on the darkspore hordes controlling the Nexus. Created dimensional rips wherever he went, Yalan became known as the Dimensional Riptide.

(Yeah, not that great bio. I might fix it later, If I get any ideas...)
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Appearance:
A floating, fishlike being, with a long tail and sharp, serrated teeth. Alpha wears a large mechanical Visor over its head, only revealing the teeth and is bright blue; Beta is blue-green and has mechanical parts on its tail, Gamma Black/Dark Blue and has many fins all over, and Delta is purple/white and has mechanical armor all over its body. For the alpha, beta, and delta variants, enough skin is left exposed so that it does not look like a cyber hero and the mechanical parts are the color of the coat.

Weapon:
Large gems that appears on both sides of its body; these gems have a rip of light coursing through them, resembling a large glowing wound combined with a cat's eye gem.

Since Yalan has no arms or legs, it instead has an extra offense and utility slot.

Abilities----------------------------------
Basic- Riptide: two glowing orbs come out of the gems on its sides and fly in an oscillating double helix pattern, flying back and forth in a range of 4m. (e.g., the common representation of dna). These orbs deal 5-10 energy damage with each hit, and disappear if they impact darkspore. If the two glowing orbs meet in their oscillating paths, a rip effect will occur that deals 4-7 energy damage to all enemies withing 3m. As a result, however, the orbs fly slightly slowly.

Special- Riptide Links: Creates a rip in space-time where Yalan is currently standing; this rip lasts for 20 seconds, and a new rip can be placed every 2 seconds for a Maximum of 5 at a time. By themselves, these rips are unimpressive and do nothing; however, when another rip is placed, it will link up to any rips within 10m, creating a link that deals 1-2 damage to and pushes away any enemies within 3m along the link's length.

Variant-
Alpha: Time Bubble
Beta: Shooting Star
Gamma: Dimensional Rift
Delta: Celestial Comet

Squad- Celestial Portals: Creates a white hole where the cursor is pointing. If the ability is used again while the white hole is active, a black hole will be created instead; up to 5 black holes can be created at once. Black holes suck in all darkspore within 5m of them; when any entity touches the black hole (including Yalan+any of his allies), they are transported to the location of the white hole. If it was a darkspore that was transported, they will be dealt 2-3 damage, but 2-5 damage will be dealt to the black and white holes. The black holes and white holes can be destroyed; higher levels of pet health will increase their hp; higher levels of mind will decrease the damage the holes take. White holes have a base 80 health; black holes a base 42 health.

Passive-Dimensional Rip: Everytime Yalan attacks a target, there is a 50% chance to activate a dimensional rip effect, dealing 2-3 energy damage to all enemies within 4m of the impact point.

Overdrive- 100% chance to deal 2-3 energy damage.

[WebCYH]

[Voltris, the Shock Sniper]
Type:[tempest]
Genesis:[cyber]

Bio:
Before the Darkspore invaded, Voltris was an intergalactic mercenary from Infinity who specialized in killing her targets with an alien sniper rifle that fired bolts of electricity. One day, she was hired by a mysterious contact who wanted her to kill some aliens on planet Cryos. Voltris went to Cryos and discovered that the aliens that she was hired to kill were a horde of Darkspore. With a few shots of her weapon, she easily eliminated them all. She then went to planet Infinity to look for the alien that had hired her, so that she could receive her payment. As it turned out, the mysterious alien that had hired her was Crogenitor Suzu. Suzu, who had observed Voltris killing the Darkspore from a hidden camera, decided to make Voltris into a genetic hero. When Voltris went to collect her payment, she was abducted and experimented on by Suzu, who turned Voltris into a living weapon. When Votris was released from the Crogenitor's lab, she saw that her electric sniper rifle had been upgraded. When the Darkspore invaded Infinity, Voltris decided to test her newly upgraded weapon on them...
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Appearance:[Voltris is a robotic alien creature with one large, circular eye in the middle of her face. Her body has three legs and two arms. The body shape is sleek and streamlined, with a silvery color. Voltris holds a long, high-tech, looking rifle in her hands.]
Weapon:[Alien rifle that fires bolts of electricity]

ABILITIES-----------------------------

[Basic attack -Volt Shot: Voltris fires a powerful bolt of electricity from her weapon, doing 9-14 energy damage. It can also pass through enemies after damaging them. Has a longer cooldown than most basic attacks.]

[1st ability -Targeting System: Voltris takes aim with her weapon. This ability ensures that the next three attacks will be critical hits and that they are guaranteed to hit the target.]

[variant ability -Omni Shield: Instantly removes all harmful status effects and prevents all incoming damage and harmful status effects for 4 seconds.]

[squad ability -Scanner Bot: The player summons a small robot that has a small amount of health. As long as the robot is alive, the player's heroes' attacks are guaranteed to hit their targets.]

[passive ability -Electric: Voltris' attacks will cause enemies to be electrocuted. This means that they will not be able to move for a few seconds and they will receive damage over time while they are paralyzed.]

[kurliew]

Quick questions:Can we create more than one new hero?Possible for a squad?

Well, yeah. I've created 5... or 6...
I'd be very nice to see someone come up with a group of heroes set to neatly fit together in a squad!

Ive got a trio in the works, first 1 is finished, 1 is perfected, and one is just emerging from concept

Nerco Sentinel
Quantum Tempest
Bio Ravager

@DET0N8TOR
Very overpowered
Should be something like this

Basic attack- projectile that deals 7-10 outright and does 5 dps for 5 secs. Can only be cast once every 10 secs per enemy

Unique- raises 5 weak zombies in pve and 3 in pvp OR 2 nerfed copies of a random hero in pve and 1 in pvp (in pvp imagine the 'valkyrie' skill from d2)

alpha- A 10 second channel that deals 15 dps. Render takes 50% increased damage while channeling this ability
NOTE: In the future, try to keep away from strong powers with long recharge, they are boring ingame

beta-

The enemy spontaneously bursts into flames, causing 20 immediate damage and a burn

You did this ability perfectly. Infact, it was a little weak, assuming the burn is about 5-10 dps for 5 secs, add a debuff, like decreased accuracy

gamma- Way OP. This ability is an aoe lifedrain of 70 health spread out amongst the targets, with a 10% chance for a target to attack his friends

Delta- The surrounding area bursts into flame, causing the target to take no immediate damage and 10-20 dps for 5 secs, as well as a 5-10 dps each second an enemy is in the fire on the ground

Passive-Good, but a little of a ripoff of sage's passive

[Dark_Nf]

Zatz the Unpredictable
Type: Ravager
Genesis: Quantum

Bio: A genius on the planet Infinity, he was loved for his amazing technical plans weapons blue prints, devices etc, but then he did a fatal mistake, he created program VDNAT a machine that could code the user's DNA with another's DNA. Well the Crogenitor on the planet could tell problems would arise. So she went to stop it. She ruthlessly struck him down and destroyed his machine then to make sure he wouldn't cause any problems he threw him in the acid flowing rivers. Well he didn't die. His anger and armour skin protected him. He crawled out scarred and melted in many places and stewing in anger. He had never done anything wrong yet a being dared attack him? Using his scavenged machine and other machine part's he made a DNA tracker. He found her and attacked. The enraged Crogenitor Suza attacked without mercy and again crushed him. Knowing he might lose he used an experimental device to escape. A slow teleporter. Hours earlier he had set his teleportation destination to Zelem's Nexus for he found work their to access the technology their.

So now with his device fully charged his particles that were already semi teleported he could finally fully teleport. Well Suza couldn't stand to watch as this very unpredictable problem escaped. So she contacted all other Crogenitor to alert them of a being who was trying to experiment with DNA. Well after arriving on Zelem's Nexus Zelem found him. He had been working with devices and Zelem knew what to do. He took him and shattered him by using a particle destroyer, a new experimental weapon to completely shatter his particle make up. His particle's destroyed the most amazingly unpredictable thing happened. The weapon had shattered the particles all around him creating rips in spaces were Zatz's particles were absorbed. There his particles were used to repair the rip thus fusing him with space. It took year's until a unlucky bloke was sucked into a worm hole were Zatz's particle's fused with the unlucky bloke and then, the two beings now one, were deposited into a different location.

In the middle of a Darkspore swarm. Zatz finally with the ability to think and to have the ability to do what he wanted, so he exploded in anger at the universe for it's assault on him. The years of his particle's absorbing matter, radiation, cosmic rays, and the molecular make up of the shot from the particle destroyer, made his make up a being of power that could match that of a super nova, so then in the burst of anger he released most of his infinite power in a quantum blast, he incinerated the Darkspore. His anger now calmed he gained a new perspective, partly from his host's own mind. That of being able to forgive. He now realized why those beings sought to destroy him, for as he watched the Darkspore regroup he knew were they arouse from. A faulty DNA test. The host he had found had a deep wisdom, and was up to date with the current events so his genius and infinite power along with the host's wisdom, lead him to seek vengeance by destroying something that he himself could have started. With his new Quantum power's he unleashed a unpredictable wrath on the Darkspore, to which Crogenitor Suza saw and she learned that things can redeem themselves.

(Sorry if it's long or dumb I tried )(I also had him sucked into the rift because I wanted him to no what it felt like to be gone out of existent etc)
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Appearance: A blue/grey humanoid body very wiry and sleek with claw like fingers and claw like feet has a glowing aura. (Alpha has 3 black spikes on back, beta has a black body with grey plating, gamma has buffer looking proportions and delta has black wings and a silver body)
ABILITIES-----------------------------
[Basic attack] Matter shot. A long range grey pulse that disturbs the matter in its trail so that the attack itself does 4-10 damage and the trail does rapid 1s. (Trail only last's for 2 seconds) (Also if their is 3 Darkspore in a line he will teleport to each one and shoot it point blank then he will teleport back)*this special effect has a 3 minute cool down*

[1st ability] Atomic rush. Blinks to wherever the cursor is and everything in a 4m radius will be in range of the Atomic radiation of his particles. Deals 17-34 to whoever the cursor was on and everything in the radioactive zone tasks 50 damage over a period of 5 seconds.

Alpha: shooting star
Beta: Time bubble
Gamma: Celestial Comet
Delta: Dimensional rift.

[Squad ability] Cosmic surge. Will do a yellow cone blast and everything in a 20m radius is hit for 10 damage and then 2 seconds after is is used a supernova blast is realeased doing 3-16 damage and absorbing 50% of the damage as power.

[Passive ability] Unpredictable rift. Enemies in a 7m radius have a 3% chance every 2 seconds to get banished and for every second their in a 7m radius it goes up 3%. For everything banished his attack's can do 10% more damage stacking up to 7 times

[CrogenitorSeims]

Sonus, the Hyper-Sonic Warrior

Genesis Type:
Quantum

Hero Class:
Ravager

Planet of Origin:
???

Gender:
Male

Back-story:
???



Appearance - Picture and/or Description:
Bipedal, similar to a cross between Vex and lighter-built Magnos, with cylindrical Blasters on his wrists.




Basic Attack:
[Icon Pending] Sonic Burst – 12m range – 0.8s cooldown

Fires a burst of Sonic Energy in a narrow frontal cone that widens to 4m, and deals 6-8 energy damage. It also has a 100% chance to knock-back, but the knock-back chance decreases by 5% every 1m. Each enemy that is knocked back by this attack will develop a 15% resistance to being knocked-back again for 4 seconds. Resistance stacks 3 times.

Animation: [---]



Unique Ability:
[Icon Pending] Concussive Charge – 15m range – 20s cooldown – 18 power – Channeled

After concentrating for 1 second, Sonus builds up enough Kinetic Energy to charge into the selected area. Enemies within a 4m of that area will be knocked-back in a frontal cone, and receive 15-25 energy damage.

Animation: [---][/size]



Variant Abilities:

Shooting Star

Dimensional Rift

Time Bubble

Celestial Comet

Squad Ability:
[Icon Pending] Kinetic Blast – 20m range – 25s cooldown – 26 power – Instant Cast

Fires a projectile that deals 15-20 energy damage, and generates a fast-traveling Sonic Boom that knocks-back enemies within 8m. The initial target will become vulnerable to 50% more energy damage, and all affected enemies will become Disoriented for 5 seconds.

Animation: [---]

Modifiers:

Sonus' Kinetic Blast: explodes on contact but doesn't inflict Energy Vulnerability
Sonus' Kinetic Blast: Stops target and Slows other enemies but cost much more power

Passive Ability:
[Icon Pending] Forward Momentum

Sonus’ Movement and Projectile Speed increase 5% for every 2m they travel, and his Attack Speed increases 5% each time he attacks. Also Projectiles deal an additional 1 damage every 2m traveled. Forward Momentum Stacks 10 times, but is lost 2 second after they stop moving or attacking.

Overdrive

Sonus’ Movement and Projectile Speed increase 5% for every 1m they travel, and his Attack Speed increases 10% each time he attacks. Also Projectiles deal an additional 2 damage every 1m traveled. Forward Momentum lasts 4 seconds after they stop moving or attacking.

Animation: [---]

[FfDdc]

This Spot is Reserved for: 'Sonus: the Sonic Warrior' (Title Pending)
(I'll add him here when I get the time. . .)

Also, the Following Name and Titles are Reserved:
(If any of the following names are already taken, please post a link to them):

Quietus: the Nightmare Child (Title Pending) (Male Necro Ravager)
Votlaj: ? (Female Plasma Sentinel)
Thorn: ? (Male Bio sentinel)
Japonica: the Poisoner (Name Pending*) (Female Bio Tempest)
Blaster: ? (Male Cyber Ravager)
Pulsar: ? (Male Quantum Tempest)
Charger-T4: ? (Male Cyber Sentinel)
XLR-8R: ? (Male Cyber Tempest)
Ghoul: ? (Male Necro Sentinel)
Fyra: ? (Female Plasma Tempest)
Vulacanus: ? (Male Plasma Ravager)

* 'Japonica' is a kind of poisonous plant from Japan, that is related to Rhododendrons, however, due to recent events in Japan, some may find this offensive.)

A Name list? You've really thought that far ahead?

EDIT: Some names I claim
Hyperion, Watcher from Above- Cyber Sentinel
Kalgarac the Burning Nova- Plasma Ravager
that's it for now, I'll update If I get any more ideas.

Oh, and Thorn has already been taken.

[WebCYH]

Future list of heroes I might make:

Vuuduu, the Skull Shaman -Necro Tempest
Infernox, the Pyromaniac -Plasma Sentinel
Blobb, the Devourer -Bio Sentinel
Neuros, the Mind Invader -Quantum Tempest
Goj, the Ancient Fury -Plasma Sentinel
Bolt, the Machine Creator -Cyber Tempest
Voidus, the Unknown -Necro Ravager
Omega, the Unstable Reactor -Cyber Sentinel

[Dark_Nf]

well i finished myn finally. Zatz the Unpredictable. Check him out tell me what you think.

[CrogenitorSeims]

This Spot is Reserved for: 'Sonus: the Sonic Warrior' (Title Pending)
(I'll add him here when I get the time. . .)

Also, the Following Name and Titles are Reserved:
(If any of the following names are already taken, please post a link to them and I'll remove them from my list.)

[list]Quietus: the Nightmare Child (Title Pending) (Male Necro Ravager)
Votlaj: ? (Female Plasma Sentinel)
Japonica: the Poisoner (Name Pending*) (Female Bio Tempest)
Blaster: ? (Male Cyber Ravager)
Pulsar: ? (Male Quantum Tempest)
Charger-T4: ? (Name Pending) (Male Cyber Sentinel)
XLR-8R: ? (Male Cyber Tempest)
Ghoul: ? (Male Necro Sentinel)
Fyra: ? (Female Plasma Tempest)

* 'Japonica' is a kind of poisonous plant from Japan, that is related to Rhododendrons, however, due to recent events in Japan, some may find this offensive.)

A Name list? You've really thought that far ahead?

Yeah, more people are making Heroes, so I want to claim these names before someone else does.

I've actually had these ideas for Heroes for awhile, but they're still not ready.

Surprisingly, Ravatron is the newest of my Hero ideas, only a few days old, but is currently the most complete. Whereas most of my older Hero ideas are still fairly incomplete.

Sonus, Japonica, and Quietus are my oldest, I thought of them in late November 2010.

[WebCYH]

[Vuuduu, the Skull Shaman]
Type:[tempest]
Genesis:[necro]

Bio:
Vuuduu was a the chief of his tribe on Nocturna. One day, the Nocturni Legion destroyed his village and Vuuduu was forced to flee for his life. After escaping the Legion, Vuuduu was furious and vowed revenge. He attacked the Nocturni legion's forces and destroyed many of them. The Nocturni Legion realized that they needed to destroy Vuuduu before he became more dangerous, so they sent Arakna the Soul Collector to kill him. Vuuduu faced Arakna and after a long, hard, battle, Vuuduu was defeated and forced to escape. However, his defeat made him more powerful than before. During the battle, Arakna had bitten Vuuduu, accidentally transferring some of her necro powers to him. Vuuduu now had gained the power to cast strange spells and bring the dead back to life. One day, Vuuduu was ambushed by a horde of Darkspore. He killed some of them with his new abilities. He then reanimated the dead bodies of his foes and used them to kill off the rest.
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Appearance:[Vuuduu is a thin, bony-looking bipedal creature wearing a tribal-looking mask with a long beak. He also wears tribal-looking clothes and has mysterious tattoos on his body. Vuuduu's skin is a dull shade of purple for the alpha varient. He holds a shaman staff with an alien skull on it.]
Weapon:[Skull Staff used to cast spells]

ABILITIES-----------------------------

[Basic attack -Necro Pulse: Fires a projectile that does 10-16 energy damage and also pushes the enemy backwards. Any enemy killed by this attack will be reanimated and start attacking other enemies for a few seconds before dying again.]

[1st ability -Blood Ritual: Vuuduu sacrifices half of his current health and energy in order to summon a wave of dead spirits that attack enemies, doing 70-120 energy damage.]

[variant ability -Affliction Bolt: Summons a semi-intelligent necroplasm for 12 seconds which will inflict a curse upon each enemy it touches. Cursed enemies will take 33 energy damage over 8 seconds.]

[squad ability -Undead Curse: Enemies that are killed in the next 30 seconds have a 25% chance to being reanimated and attacking other enemies.]

[passive ability -Dark Magic: All abilities have a 10% chance of causing a random negative necro status effect]

[kurliew]

Obsidian, the Skyborn Reaper
Detritus, the lving decayed OR the decayed one---what do u guys think
Surtr OR Surtur, the Crippled Mindblade (taking advice for title)

[Dark_Nf]

Detritus the decaying one how bout that? i like that one better
I dont like the tr sound so how bout "Surtax" ?


wat u think bout Zatz?

[kurliew]

surtr/surtur a actually a figure from norse mythology, so i wanna keep that but change the title to something that has 'cripple in it and a reference to his mind/imagination

Thx dark-nf

[Dark_Nf]

o ok. o and btw SOM1 plz look at my new dude

[FfDdc]

o ok. o and btw SOM1 plz look at my new dude

Well, as far as I can tell you haven't posted him yet.
That might lead to problems with people seeing him.

[kurliew]

Zatz the Unpredictable
Type:Ravager
Genesis:Quantum

Bio: A genius on the planet Infinity, he was loved for his amazing technical plans weapons blue prints, devices etc, but then he did a fatal mistake, he created program VDNAT a machine that could code the user's DNA with another's DNA. Well the Crogenitor on the planet could tell problems would arise. So she went to stop it. She ruthlessly struck him down and destroyed his machine then to make sure he wouldn't cause anymore problems he threw him in the acid flowing rivers. Well he didn't die. His anger and armor skin protected him. He crawled out scarred and melted in many places and stewing in anger. He had never done anything wrong yet a being dared attack him? Using his scavenged machine and other machine part's he made a DNA tracker. He found her and attacked. He had a knife made of pure crystallized acid and went on the attack. The enraged Crogenitor Suza attacked without mercy and again crushed him. Knowing he might lose he used a experimental device to escape. A slow teleporter. Hours earlier he had set his teleportion destination to Zelem's Nexus for he found work their to escape acsess the technology their.

So now with his device fully charged his particles that were already semi teleported could finally fully teleport. Well Suza couldn't stand to watch as this very unpredictable problem escaped. So she contacted all other Crogenitors to alert them of a being who was trying to experiment with DNA. Well after arriving on Zelem's Nexus Zelem found him. He had been working with devices and Zelem knew what to do. He took him and shattered him by using a particle destroyer, a new experimental weapon to complety shatter his particle make up. His particle's destroyed the most amazingly unpredictible thing happened. The weapon had shattered the particles all around him creating a rip in space were Datz's particle's were absorbed. Their his particles were used to repair the rip thus fusing him with space. It took year's until a unlucky bloke was sucked into a worm hole were Datz's particle's fused with the unlucky bloke and then, the two beings now one, were deposited into a difrent location.

In the middle of a Darkspore swarm. Datz finally with the ability to think and to have the ability to do what he wanted, exploded in anger at the universe for it's assault on him. The years of his particle's absorbing matter radition, cosmic rays, and the molecular make up of the shot from the particle destroyer, made his make up a being of power that could match that of a super nova, so then in the burst of anger he released most of his infinite power in a quantum blast, incinerated the darkspore. His anger now calmed gain a new perpective, partly from his host's own mind. That of being able to forgive. He now realized why those beings sought to destroy him, for as he watched the darkspore regroup he knew were they arouse from. A faulty DNA test. The host he had found had a deep wisdom, and was up to date with the current event's so his genius and infinite power along with the host's wisdom, lead him to seek vengeance by destroying something that he himself could have started. With his new Quantum power's he unleashed a unpredictable wrath on the darkspore, to which Crogenitor Suza saw and herself learned that things can redeem themselves.

(sorry if it's long or dumb i tryed )(i also had him sucked into the rift because i wanted him to no what it felt like to be gone out of existent etc)
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Appearance: A blue/gray humanoid body very wiry and sleek with claw like fingers and claw like feet has a glowing aura.(Alpha has 3 black spikes on back, beta has a black body with gray plating, gamma has buffer looking proportions and delta has black wings and a silver body)
ABILITIES-----------------------------
[Basic attack] Matter shot. A long range gray pulse that disturbes the matter in it's trail so that the attack itself does 6-14 damage and the trail does rapid 1s.

[1st ability] Atomic rush. Does an attack like Arakna's but it has a special effect. It practically get's the things in the way drunk on atomic power. Their energy attack's can do a max of 30 higher damge but every single one of their attacks even not energy hurt them as much as the attack hurts the recipitent. If it doesn't hit anyone they will lose 10 health. Damage 23-30

The normal 4 variant Quantum variants.

[squad ability] Cosmic surge. Will do a yellow cone blast and everything in a 20m radius is hit for 10 damage also does effect like Atomic rush's

[passive ability] Unpredictable rift. Enemies in a 7m radius have a 10% chance every second to get banished and while banished, their health is drained.

FfDdc he meant this one

Good idea behind the bio, but could have been expressed better 'unlucky bloke' could be replaced with 'unknowing technician'. About the skillset

Basic attack- bring the max damage down a point or 2

ability 1- i dont understand what you said. All I understand is that it buffs and debuffs the enemy

Variant ability- nobody read my post about alternate variant abilities, did they?

Squad- this one is good

Passive a bit op

But good work, especially the idea behind the bio

[TranquilSilence]

I edited my Hero,What do you guys think of Giaus?

[Dark_Nf]

il read ur soon^


and lurliew il edit his things and the "unlucky bloke" was just some unlucky dude simple as that but the unlucky dude is wise. and kurleiw i just couldnt remeber the variants but i do now.

[kurliew]

I edited my Hero,What do you guys think of Giaus?

I will only point out the problems, but dont take this as a sign that it is bad, thats just the kind of person i am
The main problems would be that the unique ability is just a stronger version of his basic attack, meaning there is little variety and that his other ability depends on his location (a cave) to be effective, which i would not recommend. The steam ability was good though

Oh, and he has no passive

@dark_nf, changing surtr's name to Surtur, the Cripple of Sryot

working on detritus' skillset now